We start with a far shot of the "Welcome to Longview Texas" sign. We are getting closer to this sign and a man starts entering the screen from the lower right.
Miguel Ontiveros, Mid twenties, great shape.
He has a military type pack on him and he is jogging down the road. We follow him pass the truck dealership. Then we cut to him jogging by burgerking and waffle shoppe and kroger. Then he passes by casa ole, then the bowling ally. During all of this the credits are coming up. Produced by Miguel Herrera Produced By Luis Vazquez Patricia Vazquez Juanita Elizabeth Herrera. Cinematography by Luis Miguel and Juanita.
Then when the character jogs out of the screen for the bowling alley shot the title, "Where's my Sister?" will come up. Or whatever we decide the title will be.
Then we cut to a shot his house.
He jogs into the shot and stops on the walkway. lets down his pack and takes out a water and drinks the whole thing.
Then serenity, little nine year old girl comes outside.
Miguel: what's up
Serenity: (hands him another water bottle)I brought you another bottle.
Miguel: Thanks sweetheart.
Serenity:I can drag your pack inside.
Miguel: No thank you. I got it.
Serenity: Alright.(She heads back inside and as she enters the door) love you
Miguel: love you too baby girl.
Then he heads around the house to the back and enters his room. Then he pulls out a rifle from his huge pack and puts it next to two other rifles in the closet.
Miguel's Mother: Do you have to keep those in the house.
(he turns around and doesn't say anything.)
Miguel i am talking to you. What if serenity saw these or you with them.
Miguel: I never know when they'll call me. Just tell her they're bb guns.
Miguel's Mother: Oh okay. Then your sister is going to kill herself because she thought they were bb guns.
Miguel:Look i will lock the door. He locks the door.
Miguel's Mother: Ugh miguel you worry me...
Miguel: That's a mother's job. Then he kisses her on the cheek.
(Mother walks away)
V.O.:We have a job for you. (Voice over the phone.)
Miguel:Hello. What the hell...
(Walks into the kitchen.)
Miguel's Mother: Who was it?
Miguel: Nobody. where's Serenity?
Miguel's Mother: Outside.
Miguel:Hey Seren! What you reading? Hello! Seren?
Serenity:Shh... Judy Bloom is about to save the day.
Miguel:Seren, why are you reading on such a nice day. you should be playing basketball, soccer, softball, something outdoorsy.
Serenity:Well, i will if you want to play, but i am investing in my future right now...
Miguel: (Scoffs) ahem. well, then. that's a good reason, i guess... You know what though? I heard you wanted a laptop...
Serenity: (Immediately puts the book down) What?! You are going to buy me a laptop?!!! (starts jumping up and down.) Please! Please! Please!
Miguel: Alright let's go.
(camera goes to black because Miguel walks on front of the camera and his shirt is black)
(Smooth nice fluid Transition to BestBuy)
Serenity:Thank you for the laptop.
Miguel:You are welcome.
(They are walking around BestBuy at this point Miguel has the laptop, in a bag, in his hand. Now they are just shopping, walking and looking around.)
Serenity:You work for the oil field right?
Serenity:Is that why I never see you?
Miguel:What do you mean? I am right here. (Waves his hand in front of her eyes) don't you see me...?
Serenity: No. (Serious.) I haven't seen you in four months, 2 weeks, and a day.
Miguel: (Miguel is taken by surprise.) Whew. Keeping count are we?
Serenity:I just want you back. For good...
Miguel: (Miguel Kneels) Seren. I am working for you and mom. That's it. Not for myself or for anyone else. Just for the two of you. I wish there was another way. I love you baby girl. I will always be here for you. (Miguel kisses her on the cheek.)
Serenity: (She hugs him.) I love you more.
Miguel:Come on let's go.
(They walk outside.)
(Fade to Black)
(Transition to outside of the house. They have Styrofoam cups. Miguel takes a swig out his cup. He is carrying the bag from best buy.)
Serenity: Thanks for the chicken, Miguel.
Miguel:Anytime. (walks toward house.) I am going to get a basketball.
Serenity:I just ate! I am going to read for a little bit.
Miguel: Ugh. Alright! (He laughs.)
(A truck pulls up! Few guys come out and start shooting up the house. Serenity screams! She hides behind a chair! One guy picks her up. Miguel shows up at the door, he has his rifle and he shoots a few guys down. The trucks peel out, as they leave one of the guys in the bed chunks a flash grenade! We see Miguel cover his ears, jump to the ground, close his eyes! Everything goes to white...)
(Black print pops up with the words "30 years earlier. Tuesday September 7, 4:00 p.m."
Oscar Escamilla, a 14 year old mexican boy propped up against an e-z mart.
The one on Mccann next to cotton patch.)
He is propped up eating a lollipop. Then, here comes Juan Morales. 17 year old Mexican boy, who is huge and looks like he is at least 30 years old.
JUAN: Come brother. I will make you a man.
(All of a sudden, Juan hands Oscar a hand cannon. Oscar stares in amazement, and follows Juan into the gas station dazed.)
(Juan speaks to the gas station owner)
(Draws a revolver on the owner)
We will leave with your money. it is your decision if we leave you alive or dead.
(Gas station-OWNER, late 60's, has a huge cigar in his mouth, and is counting a huge wad of money.) (NOT AFRAID): Do you know who you are stealing from?
(He hands Juan the wad he had started counting before this terrible event occurred.)
(As he is taking the money out of his hand) JUAN: You are giving this to me so that makes you an accessory. (He shoves the money into Oscar's pockets) This is his money, now. Thank you, Sir. Have a nice Day.
(JUAN EXITS. OSCAR FOLLOWS. JUAN LAUGHS THEN TO OSCAR.)
You did pretty well! You are a natural! I love it! Let's see... (holds out his hand in front of Oscar and for a minute Oscar does nothing; then remembers he has the money and hands the wad to Juan) here is half for you (HANDS MONEY TO OSCAR) and half for me. (puts it in his pocket)
OSCAR: (as he puts the money in his pocket) Who are you?
JUAN: My name is Juan Morales, but you can call me whatever you like, Little Man.
OSCAR: How did you know I would follow you inside?
JUAN: Well, I didn't.
I have seen you walking past that old place for the past 3 months. Anyways, your gun didn't have bullets, but he didn't know that. (REFERRING TO THE GAS STATION-OWNER)
(OSCAR IS LOOKING AT JUAN WITH GREAT CURIOSITY AND WONDERMENT. THEY BOTH BEGIN TO WALK TOWARD THE LEFT OF THE SCREEN.)
You see Oscar. That old man has never been robbed. Due to the Fact that Fat Freaking Frank, usually, sits in front of the counter with a gun, on his belly.
TRANSITION TO A CUT AWAY VOICE-OVER AND THE FOLLOWING NARRATION WILL BE OCCURRING. A lot of quick cuts of shorts clips. So it starts with a really big guy. Low angle so you have to see his greasy face over his big belly that has a gun sitting on top. The color scheme should be a dark, murk, cold yellows.
Fat Frank leaves early every other Tuesday of the month. Around 2 p.m. he drives down the road and picks up his daughter from his wife, a rather cute mother, mind you. (Close up on the cute mother) That's beside the point, sorry. (Comical swipe transition to frank and April in the car) After that, Fat Bob and April, his daughter, go to the park, on the corner of Bill Owens and Fairmont. Then around 7 it gets dark, so he takes her to Chuck E Cheese. At that point, I go home. (Transition back to him talking to Oscar) So, today I saw him pick up his daughter. Then I headed to that old man's place. As always, you were on your way home from school.
OSCAR: You followed me too?
Juan: Of course brother. (THEY HAVE REACHED OSCAR'S HOME. HE WALKS TOWARDS THE DOOR AND IS ALMOST INSIDE) Hey, find another way home, bud.
OSCAR (VOICE-OVER): As I walked into the house, (OSCAR WILL BE IN THE HOUSE AND PLAYING WITH A MINI-MEXICAN FLAG AT A DESK) it occurred to me; never had I really lived in Mexico. I barely knew anything of Mexican culture, only the Spanish language. Intuitively, I knew this guy could speak the Spanish language, but knew as much as me about Mexico. Yet, he created a great love within me. He was my brother... I told myself I would never see him again, but a year later...
(OSCAR IS RESTING UPON A WALL NEAR THE DOOR TO ANOTHER GAS-STATION. DRINKING A SODA.)
JUAN: What are you doing out here brother? The action is inside.
AGAIN JUAN HANDS A GUN TO OSCAR. THEY ENTER THE STORE.JUAN TALKING TO THE CLERK. HOLDS OUT A BAG.
You know what to do.
(THE CLERK FILLS THE BAG AND DROPS IT. THE CLERK BENDS DOWN TO GRAB THE BAG. JUAN IS NOW TALKING TO OSCAR) Shoot him.
(OSCAR SHOOTS OFF THREE ROUNDS AND THE FIRST ONE LANDS IN THE CLERK'S SHOULDER AND THE NEXT TWO GET HIM IN THE CHEST. THE CLERK FALLS BACK AND HITS THE SHELF AND KNOCKS OVER MANY CIGARETTES.JUAN GOES AROUND OSCAR AND OVER THE COUNTER. PICKS UP THE BAG FILLS IT WITH MONEY AND PICKS UP A GUN THAT THE CLERK WAS GETTING.HE COMES BACK AROUND. AS THEY EXIT.)
Great! (JUAN HANDS THE BAG TO OSCAR) You earned all of it. Our country would be proud. The last image of this scene is OSCAR HOLDING THE brown paper bag of MONEY AND SMILING. We freeze this image and Oscar delivers the next line while the image is frozen on the screen.
Oscar (VOICE-OVER): Like that he was gone. A few months later, he returned and we had our biggest score. (QUICK SCENE OF THEM STEALING A LOT OF JEWELRY) This would be a black in white shot, from a far bird's eye view. So, it looks like security camera footage.
(DURING THIS LAST VOICE OVER THERE ARE CUT SCENES THAT CORRELATE TO WHAT HE IS SAYING..)
Juan taught me the tools of the trade and encouraged my educational career, but shaped me into a great criminal. Not only did I master extortion, manipulation, blackmail, and the art of crime, but I mastered the system. The system instilled into our society to stop people like me. Undetected I have inherited a beautiful organization, Five years ago my "brother" died from a heart attack. Now, here lies the conflict...(The scene cuts to an aged Oscar sitting in a hospital chair, crying, and obviously distraught.) I have only three great loves: The love for my God, the love for my daughter, and the love for my empire. My empire is powerful. My daughter is my power source, but My God has punished me. My abuelita always told me God would curse my children. (The camera pans to the hospital bed, his daughter has tubes all around her, and in her… giving a lasting image that she is terminal) Now he has given my daughter an incurable disease:
(Dr. David Ortiz, early 30's, scientist. Weathered. )
Dr. David Otriz: Methlosincuranoma.
Veronica Garcia, early 20's, personifies beauty.
Veronica: Methlo…? What? Sorry.
Dr. Ortiz: No worries. Methlosincuranoma, an incurable disease… for now.
Veronica: Well…uhm. Here are your messages. (hands him pieces of paper)
Dr. Ortiz: Thank you Veronica.
Veronica: No problem. Doctor. (walks away)
Dr Ortiz (under his breath.): Please, call me David.
(He leafs through his mail, and throws most of it away.) He mutters while he is doing this.
Oh, David I missed you. Oh I missed you too Veronica. Oh you want to have sex on my desk? Sure no problem. Ugh… yeah right… As if… (He gets his briefcase and heads to his car)
Veronica: Good night Dr. See you tomorrow.
Dr. Ortiz: Hopefully.
(Transition to Dr. Ortiz walking in a big empty parking garage. He is muttering to himself again.)
Oh take me home with you Dr. Oh, I will do that and so much more Veronica.
(He opens the door and gets into the car. We see Miguel in the backseat through the mirror.)
What the hell!
(Miguel throws a black bag over his head. Everything goes to black.)
(Fade into an abandoned building Dr. Ortiz is tied up to a chair and Miguel is sitting in a chair across from him.)
Dr. Ortiz: (Groans) What did you do to me?
Miguel: Come now. Doc. You should know what chloroform is.
Dr. Ortiz: What is this about?
Miguel: I will tell you.
Transition to the white and we fade in to see Miguel on the floor he is in pain he gets up and is rather disoriented. He stomps over to the street, to the only guy still breathing.
Miguel: Who sent you?
Pickup Guy: (groans and moans)
Miguel: WHO THE FUCK SENT YOU!
(Miguel kicks the pickup guy repeatedly)
Pickup Guy: Dr…. Dr… David… Ortiz….
(Miguel kicks one final death blow to the head. We see the kick. Then the head fling back painfully. We hear a bone wrenching crack.)
(Transition back to Dr. Ortiz in the Warehouse)
Dr. Ortiz (babbling between tears and mucus): What?! What?! I don't know anything about a little girl, man! Or who the fuck you are! I don't know! I don't know what is going on here!
Miguel: Of course you don't. Shhh... Look. I am not going to kill you. I believe you. Why would some faggot scientist want to kidnap my sister?
Dr. Ortiz: I am not a fa-fa-faggot.
Miguel: Does faggot offend you?
Dr. Ortiz: Ye-ye-yes.
Miguel: Are you a (mockingly) fa-fa-faggot?
Dr.Ortiz: No.no. I just just I just.
Miguel: Shut up! You right. I am sorry. It's ignorant. I am just fucking pissed. My sister is gone and you are all I have to go on. So, I am sorry but I am going to have to shoot you.
Dr. Ortiz: What? No. Why? You… you said it yourself. I have nothing to-
Miguel: I know. I know what I said, but the thing is… I have to shoot you to enforce my power and control over you I don't want you running away on me or trying to escape.
Dr. Ortiz: How-How how does that work?
Miguel: For a Doctor you are pretty stupid.
Doc, I am going to shoot you in your knee.
Dr.Ortiz: No! Please No!
Hell. I have to take this.
(Puts the Gun in Dr. Ortiz's Mouth)
Oscar: Good job, Miguel. You have performed excellently. Don't hurt the Doctor. He knows nothing. Whatever you do to him, I will do to your sister, rest assured, if you deliver the doctor to me, I will safely return your sister to you.
(Phone hangs up)
Miguel: We are leaving.
(Walks behind Dr. Ortiz)
Dr. Ortiz: Why?
Miguel: You are well protected for not being involved Doc
(Miguel throws a black bag over his face everything goes to black)
(Transition to Foggy disoriented fade in and fade out of a hotel room, this is from the doctor's point of view. We see a clock, window, bed, and a phone. Then transition out of the point of view to a wide shot to reveal that the doctor is taped to the corner of the room where the wall and door meet.)
Dr. Ortiz: What are you doing to me? It's not chloroform… That only works in the movies. I work with neuroplasticity and neurotransmitters, and chloroform doesn't work this way…
Miguel: Shut up, Doc.
(Phone in the hotel Rings)
Hello. Is the food ready?
Oscar: You think you can run, Miguel?
Miguel: How did you find me?
Oscar: That doesn't matter. What matters is that I can kill you and your sister at any moment. I just need you to do something for me.
Miguel (shouts): Let me talk to my sister.
Red dot sight is seen on Miguel's shirt, he then ducks, and the room gets shot up. He ducks and starts shooting out the window. The Shooting stops. Then the phone rings again.
Oscar: Miguel. I am doing the talking. The sooner you realize that you aren't in control of this situation the safer your sister will be.
Phone hangs up
Miguel: What do you do David?
Miguel points the gun at him
Dr. Ortiz: Wh-wha-what?
Mguel: Why would they want you doc what do you do?
Dr: I told you I work with degenerative diseases, specialize inneuroplasticity.
Miguel: What diseases? I need the names, I need the names right now!
Dr: uhhmmm alzheimers, ALS, mertlisincuranoma,dementia, and parkinsons.
Miguel starts pacing around the room.
Dr. Ortiz: What’s goin on ?
Miguel: Doc Shut up! I am thinking. Alrgiht I haven’t heard of that one with an m
Dr. Ortiz: Mel-
Miguel: Yes that one. How many people have that in this state how common is it?
Dr. Ortiz: I don’t know about 200 people. It’s really rare, that’s what I have been working on.
Miguel: Alright. Alright how many people are there in Longview with that disease Doc?
Dr. Ortiz: I don’t know.
Miguel: Don’t lie to me Doc you know. You know them personally I bet.
Dr. Ortiz: Okay. Okay. I Know. Seven.
Miguel heads to the drawer between the beds.
Miguel: Here doc. Right down the names and where I can find them right now and tomorrow.
Throws the memo pad and pen at David
Hurry up Doc! This is your life your messing around with Hurry up!!!!
Okay Thanks, Doc. I am sorry.
Miguel knocks him out again.
Transition to the Doctor’s office and Miguel is sitting at Dr. Ortiz’s desk finding information about the people on the list. He finds a file on Oscar’s daughter.
We hear a key turn in a lock and the door opens. Miguel gets up quietly after putting the computer to sleep.
He quietly goes to the other side of the doorway.
Veronica comes into the office. She goes to turn on the lights, and as she does Miguel grabs her by her ponytail and puts a knife to her throat.
Miguel (whispers): Who are you?
Veronica: I am… I am… Veronica, Dr. Ortiz’s secretary. I am just a temp. I had to bring some papers back. Please don’t kill me. Please don’t kill me.
Miguel: I am not going to kill. I am not. I promise. I just need you not to panic or scream. I am David’s friend. He is in some real trouble, and I didn’t know if I could trust you, but now come to think of it. You are that sexy secretary David is always telling me about.
So, I am going to let you go.
Miguel let’s her go. He checks her out. Yeah. You’re that secretary.
She nervously laughs.
Veronica: So, how do you know Dr. Ortiz?
Miguel: We went to school together.
So, what do you know about Methlosincuranoma?
Veronica: Uhhmm. Nothing really, sorry. I am just a temp. I brought these files back they are dictations of some of his trials. If you want to read up on them, I don’t really know what they say.I just type. It goes in and out. Sorry. I will shut up now.
Veronica laughs nervously. Miguel laughs.
Miguel: Don’t worry it’s okay.